Hee!! I loved the vision of Draco being dragged off by men in white coats! :)
I confess that I have very little knowledge of constructing poetry, so you may be right in that respect. I don't know…
As for how a character speaks, it's very true that they may say it wrong based on their upbringing and circumstances. And it's so easy to insert the extra words into the character's dialogue because of our own use of language. In fact, I have to be very careful when editing my own work to make sure I find all the references to "just", and delete more than half of them while I'm at it. I just have this habit of using that word all the time. :)
No matter if the character says it or not within the dialogue, redundancy should not be used after a vocalization, or in a dialogue tag, as the question was posed (at least how I interpreted it).
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I confess that I have very little knowledge of constructing poetry, so you may be right in that respect. I don't know…
As for how a character speaks, it's very true that they may say it wrong based on their upbringing and circumstances. And it's so easy to insert the extra words into the character's dialogue because of our own use of language. In fact, I have to be very careful when editing my own work to make sure I find all the references to "just", and delete more than half of them while I'm at it. I just have this habit of using that word all the time. :)
No matter if the character says it or not within the dialogue, redundancy should not be used after a vocalization, or in a dialogue tag, as the question was posed (at least how I interpreted it).